Pages 2-5 reviewed and better!

 Hello everyone! Some people have reviewed pages 2-5 and gave me some helpful advice: giving Sully some more time before entering the abyssal residence to show off his character. So here are the revisions I made! Hope you enjoy!


Page 2

1[And now, Sully Drake will be known as the new world champion!]

2-3[Sully being given a trophy and a medal]

4[Shot of podium with 1st place, 2nd place and 3rd place people.

5[Picture of Sully popping the victory champagne.


Page 3

1[People in the cafeteria congratulating the guy who became second, while Sully sits alone.

2[guy: That’s the guy who stole the title.

3[Dude: Then let’s make sure he can’t do it again.


Page 4

1[Guy: Hey world champ, congrats on the victory! Dude: Did you ever think: what’s next?

2[Dude: Because there is a challenge... Guy: No, that would be way too hard.

3[Sully: Tell me and see me beat it! Dude: Fine, it is called...


Page 5

Narrator: The Abyssal challenge

1[Sully in from of Abyssal residence (looks like a deserted hotel)]

 

The rest of the story is the same, but I will be taking a look at page 6 after the vacation to add a little more detail there, until then, peace! 

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