Page 11-22 of my story!

 Hello everyone! (or the one person who reads this XD) This will be the text of my story on pages 11-22. One shots tempt to be max 60 pages long, so that is what I am going for. I already have 22 pages and am not coming close to the end. I expected this story to be like 20ish pages, but 30-40ish is going to be more realistic. These parts will feature a fight scene, the first one of three, so I have to make sure the fight scenes stay short, so it won't be like 50% fight scene, because that is not what this story is about, but merely a part of the story I am trying to tell. Anyone I spoiled a bit too much here I think XD so let's get into the story itself. If you don't know how I tell my story, forgot the specifics, or for some reason decided to read page 11-22 before you read the first ten, here is my explanation on how I do my organize my writing and my first ten pages. And now, let's dive into the juicy story.

A drawing I made a couple of years ago. My best thus far. I'm proud of it!


Page 10: 

1-2[Jynx and Sully tranfering to the digital battlefield. 

3[Sully: What kind of battle is this anyways? 

4[Jynx: It's a free-for all, so sticking toghether is VERY IMPORTANT. Sully! CHARGE! While charging at a random cowboy 

5[Jynx: And he's off... 

 

Page 11: 

1[Sully prepares a punch while charging very dramitically. 

2[Cowboy has the gun pointed at Sully. 

3[gun shoots. 

 

Page 12: 

1[Bullets hits Sully, he feels that and is glitching

2[everything goes black. 

 

Page 13: 

1[ Sully respawns with 2 hearts above his head, resabling his life total. 

2[Sully spots the life exchange item next to him. 

3[Sully picks up the life exchange. The description displays: a life for life.

 

Page 14. 

1[ Jynx respawns next to Sully. Two hearts indicating Jynx died once. 

2[Hey, uhm. (Sully feels ashamed) Sorry for rushing in. 

3[ Jynx Are you able to work toghether now? Sully: I am 

4[Jynx: Then let's do i... 

 

Page 15 

1[Jynx get killed with a sword by Pendulum

2[Suprised Sully 3[Glitching Jynx (digital world) 

 

Page 16 

1[Picture of Pendulum, smiling. 

2[Pendulum: Tick-tock, one life remaining Jynx. 

 

Page 17 

1[Pendulum: You must be Jynx's new teammate. (Pendulum looks at Sully) Pendulum: I'll make sure neither of you can get out. 

2[Jynx, smiling:Ready? Sully: Born ready. 

 

Page 18 

1[big super smash bros like vs screen with Sully and Jynx on one side and Pendulum on the other. 

 

Page 19 

1[Jynx: if he tries to (steken in dutch, dont know english here.) you, dodge. Jynx: And if he slashes, try and catch the blade with your gloves. Sully: that would be... Jynx: trust me. 

2[Smirking Pendulum

3[Pendulum sprinting at Jynx. 

 

Page 20 

1[Jynx blocking the slash (above stands 0,1% speed) 

2[Jynx using Pendulum's blade to jump over him. 

3[Jynx slashing and Pendulum dodging this slash 

4[Pendulum trying to stab Jynx, but Jynx dodges. 

5[Sully watching the battle with an open mouth. You see 3 visual clones of the two swordfighters fighting. 

 

 Page 21 

1[Pendulum defeating jynx in combat, making jynx's sword fall. 

2[Pendulum preparing to kill jynx.

 

Page 22 

1[Sully dealing a blow from the right side of Pendulum 

2[Jynx grabbing his sword. 

3[Jynx slashing 

4[Pendulum in two pieces, glitching. 

5[Silence and both Sully and Jynx looking were Pendulum once was. Both with a smile, a soft one for Jynx. Jynx also with a tear. 

6[They do a lil happy high 5. 


That's it for now! I hope you have enjoyed thus far! Don't be afraid to tell me what you think! The more thought processes, the better!

Anyway, see ya later!

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